Rewrite this passage replacing the underlined words with more interesting alternatives:
The day before yesterday was a fantastic day. Down by the beautiful stream, a pretty bird sat singing increible. The great sun was shining in the blue sky. “Oh, how nicely to have such a wonderful morning all to myself,” I thought.
Then, a ugly bird come along. From the shape of its dark wings and its horrible legs I knew it arrive whit sad news. It carried a horrorific purse over its wing. “Who knows what unsafe things it had inside?” I thought.
The amazing bird soon stopped singing increible, and flew away quickly. I should have done the same. The mystic bird flew and landed near me. Even though it was a old bird, it was precious to have a friend. I took the mystic object off his wing and contained mysterious sentences. It said, “negative adjectives make for intimidating writing. You had better select the most convenient option.” That meant, I knew, I had to do some work.
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